I think that what you wrote was actually very reasonable. But, think on this, suppose you added a little content? I mean, I don't wish to tell you how to run your website, however suppose you added a post title to possibly grab folk's attention? I mean %BLOG_TITLE% is a little boring. You could look at Yahoo's front page and see how they write post headlines to get people interested. You might try adding a video or a picture or two to get people excited about what you've written. Just my opinion, it could bring your blog a little livelier.