Hello,<br /><br />I'm trying a couple new things the first is to keep the story shorter (as was suggested in a comment by thehangingtree about his/her own work) ... well sort of ... it's a long story but the individual bits should be satisfying ... this bit is nine pages ... short for me<br /><br />Second I'm trying for more dominance and sadism and less pure $nuff <br /><br />Third it will be in a file (as thehangingtree does) to see if this is easier ... let me know if you have an opinion ... I wonder why RTF isn't a valid file type for upload though ... I like it better than either .TXT or .DOC<br /><br />fourth I noted in my own reading that sometimes I want to to read the build up ... and sometimes I want to skip to the part where she's got a barbed wire noose around her neck and the bastard is trying to shove a 2x4 up her ass. ... if you want to go straight to the meat of the matter ... open the file and search on 'xene'.<br /><br />fifth I didn't bleep the racial slurs ... they're not to bad in this one ... may be worse later ... maybe not ... depends on what the characters do ... they're already surprising me <br /><br />This story sort of grabbed me by the scrotum and is making me write it ... I don't know how long it will go but I know two things ... I've already got more scenes in my head than I'll probably write ... and comments will make me write more and faster.